First Round Feedback on the Highway West

This novel has been a personal quest of mine for a long time.

I poured my heart out for three months into this story, but it took fifteen years for me to wrap my heads around.

The test reader enjoyed the story, the characters, and the details. That is always the most important aspect of telling a story. She mentioned that she was sad when a certain character died.

There are weaknesses that I think I need to address. There are a couple of typos and oopies throughout the the book, but those are easy to address.

Chapter 1 needs to be edited. I need to cut out some of the fat there and pull the reader into the story quicker. I have a solid idea of how to do this and make the novel stronger. I edited the first paragraph and I think it works.

Chapter 3 needs more details. I think I can add just a bit here about the relationships that come up later.

Chapter 13 needs more details for the battle. I need to show the struggle.

Chapter 17 needs to be beefed up especially the final fight. I need to make Cenotaph a bit more scare and reveal his secret here. I think I had a vague idea of trying to leave him be a mystery, but he gets overshadowed by his minons. I'm going to flesh this out. I figured out how to do this in an economical way and be awesome.

I feel pretty good overall. I am happy that my story worked and brought forth emotion from the reader. I'm really excited by this.

First Round Feedback on the Highway West

This novel has been a personal quest of mine for a long time.

I poured my heart out for three months into this story, but it took fifteen years for me to wrap my heads around.

The test reader enjoyed the story, the characters, and the details. That is always the most important aspect of telling a story. She mentioned that she was sad when a certain character died.

There are weaknesses that I think I need to address. There are a couple of typos and oopies throughout the the book, but those are easy to address.

Chapter 1 needs to be edited. I need to cut out some of the fat there and pull the reader into the story quicker. I have a solid idea of how to do this and make the novel stronger. I edited the first paragraph and I think it works.

Chapter 3 needs more details. I think I can add just a bit here about the relationships that come up later.

Chapter 13 needs more details for the battle. I need to show the struggle.

Chapter 17 needs to be beefed up especially the final fight. I need to make Cenotaph a bit more scare and reveal his secret here. I think I had a vague idea of trying to leave him be a mystery, but he gets overshadowed by his minons. I'm going to flesh this out. I figured out how to do this in an economical way and be awesome.

I feel pretty good overall. I am happy that my story worked and brought forth emotion from the reader. I'm really excited by this.