Need a Fantasy Beta Reader

[jasonandrew]

I have a story titled "Apprentice of the Mask" that has been rejected a couple of times. Each rejection came back with comments saying things like:

"I enjoyed this one -- it has good characters and solid prose. However, it opens a little slowly, and doesn't grab me as
much as a handful of other stories I'm currently considering."

I have a chance to do a rewrite and submit it and considering that it is a professional market I'm willing to give it a try. Sadly, I like the opening and am uncertain what else to do with it.

I could use another pair of eyes.

Comments

[vonandmoggy.livejournal.com]

I'm sure you'll get people offering who you actually know...but if you want the eyes of a semi-imaginary LJ stranger person, I'm happy to read it for you.

[mallory-blog.livejournal.com]

Feel free to send it over - my email is in my user info :)

You know I am a bit tough though...

[xjenavivex.livejournal.com]

send it, if you like. xjenavivex@yahoo.com